Saturday, October 8, 2011

Flash Fiction Friday (24)

Dottie over at Tink's Place have come up with the idea for a Monday Morning Flash Fiction challenge. Each Monday a new picture prompt will be posted and if you choose to participate you post your story on Friday - 350 words, give or take.

I have to thank Blodeuedd at Book Girl of Mur-y-Castell for introducing me to this fun meme. I don't know if I'll be able to keep up with every week, but I'll give it a try from time to time.

The Image This Week:
By:  Melissa
My heart thrashed in my chest as fast as the speed-metal my punk brother listens to, to the point it hurt my ribs.  Gasping for air I knew that...that thing could hear me, if their ears worked.  But they had to; I couldn't guess anything to my favor.

My throat's swollen shut from the panting and heavy breathing I've been doing.  I needed to keep moving to get away from it.  I started running again, past all the large stone front buildings.  It wasn't worth the time stopping to try the doors to find a place to hide.  I'd already tried it.  They're locked.  I've realized the buildings where the same.  A repeat of the same seven buildings, over and over and over again.  The street never seemed to end and I couldn't see an end.

Nowhere to go and I was just about out of energy to run.  Whatever was following me will over take me soon and who knows what it will do to me.  I can hear the slapping of its feet on the brick road behind me.

Lightning flashed, the crack startling me into a stumble.  I trip over my own feet, sluggish from exhaustion, scrapping my hands as I tumble to the bricks.  Turning to sit on my butt, I saw it.  No them.  Closing the distance between us.  The red on the ragged clothing, dragging of a leg here, the shuffle of another there.  Skin peeling back like someone took a potato peeler to their graying skin but didn't finish.  The stench that drifted toward me, and I turned my head to throw-up, it was like raw meat left to bake in the sun.  I could see the maggots and insects crawling through the meat and when I turned back to the monsters coming toward me, I did see the creepy crawlies in the skin and on their faces, or what should have been a face.

I didn't have the energy to run any further, all I could see where the claws, bone and torn flesh of hands coming at me.
My eyes flew open, breathing radical, heart pounding like a hammer in my chest.  I looked around in the dark; I didn't know where I was.  My room, I'm in my room.  In my soft bed, under warm blankets.  But as I turn my head, I see the buildings similar to my nightmare.


  1. Very action-packed, this one. Speed metal? Like metal on speed? ;)

  2. *puts whip away*

    Oh yes, this was worth the wait. Now, I must turn on every light in the house. ;)

  3. Freaky, I like.

    I see you survived the whip of Melissa's, and I did not.

    Sounds like nightmares I would haev

  4. Anachronist - lol. That's exactly it! ;D Metal on speed. hee hee. Thank you!

    Melissa (Books&Things) - You are really to nice to me. And it's not that bad to need to turn the lights one. ;) But thank you! Glad you enjoyed it.

    Blodeuedd - hee hee. glad you liked it! I was trying for freaky, don't know if I really hit it, but tried. Oh, and you didn't get a flash up at all!?!?! Ooooooo, your in trouble! hee hee. But you usually double yours up the next week if you miss it.

  5. Wow! Can I say "great" and "eww" at the same time? Well done, very descriptive.

  6. Carolsnotebook - :) Awww, thank you. You are to kind. I'm glad you really liked this one. :) Thank you!


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